Phone vote so no quotes. Trap I enjoyed your verse for the most part. Content was nice. But your structure and a few forced rhymes put me off. Split I'm more inclined to enjoy a verse styled like yours. A stream of ideas on the topic in a storm of punctuation and staccato reading. Some of your concepts and alliteration was stale to me. But there was some nice language and a couple standout ideas.
I like the essence/presence/repeated line from trap. Did not enjoy 'reap threats'. Did not like sentence/eyelids from split but put 'hate fizzles', 'mine did', 'debt' and the ender as positives.
Good read. Split gets my vote
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