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Activate
Not your typical style, you know what I mean? It's infectious. Honestly, I feel like ChatGPT is both a gift and a curse it should be treated that way within the creative process. Still, this was superb writing. The tie-backs, the writer's voice shining when it needs to, and just the right amount of emotional connection. That said, I did find it a bit bland at moments. You know how a protagonist like Elanor doesn’t really spark imaginative curiosity for me.

But you’re a pro at this. The world building? That’s real storytelling. I tend to enjoy more technical aspects of hip-hop for their sake, and that emotional connection you lean on sometimes trips me up. You rely on it more, but in your case, it works. It’s well written albeit less momentum or engaging as the previous not the style I prefer from you. Still, I see what you’re doing here, lol.

Fraze
Techinaclly, once again, I notice a pattern here one I admit I’ve suffer from myself. Hopefully, it won’t destroy the Netcee/online writer community as we know it. The ChatGPT connotations, though I could be completely delusional from my lack of sleep, food, sex, or oxygen for the past 23 months—but I believe you and Activate may have had some help from ChatGPT. Let’s be real, we all do at this point.

It was written well, but it leans toward what I prefer ut lacks the story coheasion and substance the topic pretty much is not as solidifed. Now, here’s the messed-up part: if Activate had used his words with your flow, I think that would’ve been my ideal verse. But as it stands, I’m giving it—by the slimmest margin—to Activate.

MVGT: Activate