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Old 07-23-2024, 04:15 PM   #23
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etherwave this was a very cool piece. i loved the concept of this verse. at first i was unsure of the "he" i thought maybe you were talking about the brain, but you were referring to the skeleton did. i really like how colorful your language were. "suffered in that cupboard"
dope.

Objective great story bro. you personify the crash dummy lol. my only issue is that i don't know what the underlying point of the verse. but i love the flow and imagery bro.

i have to go with that one that has more gravitas and with that said i will go with etherwave.
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