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Old 07-12-2024, 10:01 PM   #10
brokenhal0
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Etherwave:

Good use of punctuation to layer your flow; it made it rhyme in a very precise way to get your concept across while showing your execution of hip-hop style. I enjoyed the topic and the way you kept it short and strong, with good emotion in your wording.

Master:

I thought this was good conceptually in terms that it was more of a story while your competitor was more of a personal reflection of something happening. The problem I had reading it was it was a bit long-winded. When it comes to hip-hop, it lacked the emotion and rhyming cadence (flow) which your competitor set the tone for. It sounded a bit robotic and less master rock that I'm used to.


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