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LMAO

Universe - You where having fun here it shows honestly the whole eyes through a child teenager characterizations some writers use on this site make me scratch my head it's just cringe inducing given that some are so capable of high levels of imagination and intellect in there mental worlds ...its like modern day horror movies whose hero is the young teenage girl/boy or child ...just a played out theme... but whatever maybe im just a bitter old man... it's a noticeable pattern sometimes and maybe cause tis the season 3 writtens that been dropped this week have had some psuedo childhood teen angst/impersonals in them...whatever hip hop therapy lmao..rant over ...everything else was dope i respect that you don't give a fuck when it comes to line count.. the whole Kobe plane crash tie in with his daughters forbearance the HIP HOP cadence that helps guide the reader along the metaphorical tie in of character interactions in general shows why your one of the more talented writers on this site great closer BTW..


Frank - Well you are the last season champ you are the mod props for Having fun and still holding it down..also Thank you! for not writing something through the eyes of a child or some emo concept One more and I would have banged my head against the wall...your story had humor it was almost like reading a highlight reel on espn or some shit it had originality (how you countered kobe with jordan) slick... the signature frank bold lettering spacing and almost comic book like delivery...the little allegory of a writer on the level #23
but i think it lacked not necessarily a story but the overall mental visual of a story that rollercoasted me as a reader which universe did.... i felt like it was more ''dialogue style reading of the picture with the typical frank flex '' and then you used words like (scolding) (cussing)...''facepalm''.... i know this is a topical tourney but ain't this also a hiphop website
how many rappers actually ever use the word ''scolding'' and ''cussing''
lmao maybe slick rick and let's not even touch on ATL shawty lol
im just talking shit and having fun here...but for the effort you put in alone modding half this site....you still managed to write a enjoyable scene i just think universe's story had a little more substance and what it lacked in flair it made up for in fire lol (pun intended)


Mvgt- Universe

Frank sometimes a writers personality and humor trumps the 'emotion' or 'seriousness' that might be more relatable to the reader but who cares it's fun I do it all the time ..I always enjoy the creative skill of your work this time the flex didn't match the overall intensity universe cooked up but still very slick writing...