Honestly these are classic verses from both of you, but in this case “classic” isn’t synonymous with “good”
Cereal/Candy had the same vague writing that has hindered him for awhile now. I mean you’re getting creative, you’re painting pictures the imagery is cool but I would be lying if I knew what 97% of it meant. It seems like you’re just going off on a tangent and whatever you deem to sound good, you force in to your pieces, even if it has nothing to do with your story
DG on the other hand is a very simplistic writer, there’s not really any kind of overlying metaphor or bigger narrative, it’s usually a what you see is what you get type piece. It’s really not my type of writing and I don’t think it’s good tbh
V/Cereal
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