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Objective At first glance I seen that your piece is going to be a more solid piece to read in terms of flow and mechanics, however I kind of left off on your piece wondering the point in all this because the storytelling was lacking it just feels like a more abstract piece, which is cool but there still has to be a point and tie ins, the flow is the strongest point and the ease of read structure wise so much I read this before your opponents.
@Brokenhalo I like to keep my line length somewhere arounnd the same, it's all over the place and throws me off so you lost stylistic points in the beginning before I ever read it, mechanically the rhyming and story telling is on point, and I feel like you had a clear path more than your opponet, which I got from his there was really no path, I think this will depend on the voters mood on who wins this, I liked your multies also and how you weaved them in unpredictable places instead of traditionally having them at the end of the line.
This is a tough one, mechnically speaking objective had a verse that was easier to read, but I can't ignore the writing aspect when it comes to storytelling, and I think that is where broken excelled, this was a good battle, but I'm going to give my vote to brokenhalo.