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Old 04-11-2022, 03:28 PM   #8
brokenhal0
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Not getting into details... Adverse had the tighter polished story im not one to be a grammer nazi but it helps the reader sometimes . candy if you fully fleshed out some sentences instead of cutting them short and tightened it up a bit in terms of sensory impact.. this would have been closer..candy you have a unique style but adverse was just a more complete MC this week good job both..
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