Red. Your verse was good. I enjoyed the story of the writing much more than I did any if the technical writing abilities in your verse. I had to stop a lot because of the rhyme scheme and flow was off in my opinion. I did enjoy the story a lot tho so good job
Z. Loved this. Loved everything about this verse. The story in verse was intriguing and I was never thrown off by any of the flow or rhyme schemes.
Both were good imo. I just enjoyed 1 quite a lot more than another.
V/ Zygote
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