You know for a pair of short verses there was a lot to be said between the two of you
Fraze - believe this is the first time I read a topical of yours and I’m thoroughly impressed. Your writing was layered and had a lot of weight to it, I was thrown off too by the double use of inspiration (if you ever find yourself in the situation of repeating yourself try and find a synonym) other than that I enjoyed the rest of the piece your multi syllable rhyming matches up well and makes for a smooth read all the way through . Very good imagery and descriptive words. Enjoyable piece even if it was rushed
YDK - know you’re a talented writer man and though this did feel a little rushed I’m glad you got a verse in this week. There were some cool bits of imagery here but I felt that the narrative lacked a little bit because of the lackadaisical approach to it, just didn’t feel like you were following a storyline just venting which is cool but we need something a little more substance heavy and topic related, I did like the correlation with being free in the last bit though
Overall Fraze had the stronger verse this week, short but sweet and he got it done
V/FRAZE
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