Great Pic selection
Candy
A marked improvement from the last league.
You really focused on being consistent with your rhyming which was good.
Some good imagery, some dark, some not.
Of each face to face encounter for centuries
The trees breathe death in seeds to bleed cemeteries
Unconventional but I like it.
You wrote a good verse here and WOULD upset someone who didn't bring it like
Concrete
Awesome job man. You nailed a topic that I failed at a few years ago.
Good descriptions and rhyming throughout. Engaged throughout, despite the length.
as if they slowed down time, stared at me with glowing eyes
don't know why, they looked down on me with foreboding size
like a sick act of witchcraft glimmering through the pitch black
I reached for my rifle with a quick grab then let off six blasts
Speaks for itself pretty sick
V/ Concrete
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