MMLP - You’re always a strong writer but this piece in particular resonated with me, you had great multis and flow all while moving your storyline forward. I was too expecting some kind of weird twist that connected this to like Fallout 3 or Mad Max but the twist never came and I was good with that. You got a little predictable in the GWL with your topic selections but honestly you had a lot of good things with this verse and that little section Universe quoted up there was awesome.
Eviction - you’re super talented. It’s nice to get some fresh blood on this league who can write very well. I like how your verse connected itself to the pandemic but more importantly to death overall, honestly I related more to your piece than I did MMLP as someone with an anxiety disorder I just loved the emotions you conveyed and the different things like that. All I would suggest is shortening up your lines a little bit (I have the same issue) lol but honestly as a writer you captivated me
I’m leaning towards MMLP here because his verse was more layered and was a smoother read BUT this was super close and Eviction has no reason to be discouraged
V/MMLP
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