Thread: The Older Ode
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Old 10-29-2020, 12:29 PM   #1
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This was cool I liked your flow throughout had good multis and I loved the contrast from scenario to scenario this was a good ode to growing up

BUT

that last line almost ruined the whole piece, that was some Sinacog level shit, be better man

Other than that good work
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