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Old 07-12-2020, 03:59 PM   #9
Adverse
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I liked opener it was cool don't think I've seen that one done on him
I don't know about the saga line, over my head?
Had to Google trust the chain but that was a good bar
Cool angle with August Alsina bar good use of current events I had one too lol
Closer was alright kind of wordy, also you used the two fists set up again which was kinda redundant

Thought this was a cool little verse and you had a couple decent bars but I know you can and will have to take it up a notch in later rounds, the competition is only going to get tougher good work Slecht
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