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Old 06-29-2020, 04:25 AM   #12
brokenhal0
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Universe - Impressive flex as usual alot of content some parts lack the intention and power that specific bars wield things like :

''On closer inspection he's weaker than I thought, he aged to my surprise
I freeze him in place with my breath, burning him with lasers from my eyes
Father screamed in pain, as if realizing his upcoming demise ''

carrying the story while holding and changing topic pieces shows the talent you have
its like reading a script for a biblical marvel movie ..


Adverse - This was raw kinda gave me that gritty feel i like some parts seemed a lil
muted when carrying the tone of the overall idea Great opening :

''I've walked amongst mankind since the dawn of existence
The inception of fire, the etching of ancient hieroglyphics
I've silently smirked at your progress and watched civilizations crumble
But i am forever, i lie in anticipation underneath the rubble

its hard to carry that momentum for so long but for the most part you did
good shit

vote - Universe ... by the molecule of a dust mold ..
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