A montage of intense imagery here that connected well with the topic and make think your record deserves to be higher. It's a shame the battles got misposted because I would've liked to have seen this go against someone tackling the same topic. You brought a poetic vibe and structure here:
'stale pizza on the table ashes on the paint floor
a bird with no wings singing in the cave moss'
Best lines IMO. Vivid. I'm looking forward to what you come up with next week.
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