Johnny - great flow most of the way through, but it's rote xD all good. great connection to topic, great story - I love riddles so was hype to see this.
also for this line:
Many contestants sought an audience to answer the Regent
Thirsty for sweet victory but tasted bitter; defeated
I stopped reading for like 30 seconds just to nod at that rhyming word choice.
MMLP - good flow, tiny bit disjointed for me in a few places, but great build up of suspense to the inevitable. didn't hit the topic for me. if I'm not mistaken was a no-show? if not it felt like it, but if so, thanks for showing! :D
mvgt - Johnny
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