Just a good solid brag verse. Off the top? Threw some nice imagery in here too:
"Dig far into my unconscious, plunging to secret levels.
So deep inside my thoughts, I peak upwards and see the devil."
Stand out lines right there. Your vocab was solid. Got the job done. Rhyme scheme went off a little in a line or two but nothing major. This was a quick, easy read. Easy to follow. Stuff like this always puts me in mind of a boxer at the gym hitting the bag.
Keep posting. Please rtf.
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