[Universe]

I honestly didn't mind Exis' verse here. I liked the speech impediment section. Candy's was a little... over my head, I guess I'll say.

But Exis, this post aside, when I read your stuff it just seems like you rush it. You said it yourself, something along the lines of "I'm every bit as good as all you, I just don't try as hard". I remember seeing that line and being like... "but why don't you"?

Whatever effort you put into your verses... double it. You will see results. You obviously care enough and I can tell you tried a little more here, and it shows. Just hold yourself to a higher standard because let me tell you... the secret to success in any form of writing is patience.