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Old 02-01-2019, 01:40 PM   #9
Flow
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Vote ryno

Incred, your half way there but your execution is off in both wording and direct brutal fucking harshness. Like what I mean by that is I wanna read a bar and be left with an emotion. I want to be one of the following

Haha funny
Ohhh nasty
AHH that was clever

Etc. Your concepts are in there you just need to develop how your going to then word them to get me as the reader to one of those responses. Even just one or two bars like that an it changes the entire read of your verse.

Anyway Vote ry
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