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Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR
i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub
he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood
#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack
cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense
it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u
seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean
he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen
want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't
up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant
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LOL @ nausea slouch, that didn't work for me tbh, too far a stretch even though i see what you were doing with it. Ransomware was dope to me though, and fresh, don't think I've seen that done. Flapdoodle again was kind of original to me BUT I didn't feel like the line really had enough impact to really sting as it landed, it could have been harsher. StarFaggot was an okay personal with wordplay but again it could have been worded to hit harder. I didn't feel the diphtheria line but the closer was cool. I think when your wordplay is on, it's ON but other times it can also work against you man and this verse has highs and lows where that happens at diff points. It's a solid verse, just maybe a little inconsistent in terms of wording to really damage your opponent and fuck them up lol
Defiant: I thought the darts match line was cool and funny, I wasn't so keen on relay race as again I like harsh sounding punches that seem to destroy the opponent. To be honest I wasn't feeling a great deal from the rest of your verse, I understand they're personal punches and whatnot but they're very statementish with no real sting to them, you know? The nail in the coffin/30 line finals was a bit of clowning but it needed more from you and it just kind of tailed off toward the end for me here. Broke got it on consistency.