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Old 11-16-2017, 10:20 PM   #5
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the first 8 or 9 lines (a speck of the overall verse) stymied a few attempts in reading this. even having done so a handful of times, they don't quite come together for me - but it matters naught.

everything else was stellar.

let’s all huddle around the baggage carousel until we depart
what bothers me is the converging of a million souls living apart


that's something i'd say, but i wouldn't quite as adroitly.

thanks for the read.
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