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Old 06-29-2017, 06:51 AM   #2
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awaken reciting passages i've dreamt in the night
i can't accept the fact i'm no exception in life
somebody else's problems don't exist. sho you right
nobody else is honest as we think. so we write

open microphone relational creating a kind
there's always soul to manifest. tapes to rewind

this was my favorite section. before that it seemed like you just started writing and fell into assonance and phrases that were fun and playful for you. after that it felt a little shoehorned to me tbh. this was more of an exercise to flush through ideas than a fully realized effort to me, which is mostly how I write rhymes these days so I'm not judging.
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