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Old 11-08-2016, 12:38 PM   #4
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Originally Posted by Scripter View Post
I think it started out good but got a little dry toward the end.
thats what she said...








I thought this was pretty cool, not your normal work...
although it does have that old Buddha touch I do believe
my issue is you are stuck in your comfort zone with your pieces
you always touch on religion regardless of what you write
what I would like to see is a strong plot with some character development
this would be great if it was a OM cypher drop, but alone there isnt much foundation
well...for me at least, but I do like seeing you put in work when you can.
this felt like a watered down JESODIST piece though...you know how he gets all wacky with his rhymes.
either way I thought the opening was pretty good just like that fellow above me said...
short lines & quick delivery....nice work bruh
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