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Old 07-27-2016, 01:55 AM   #4
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the lines were very stretched in this...
not sure how you wanted me to vibe to your flow


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^^^^
this was a cool little attempt if you shortened it & twisted it
you have the whole concept of rhyming & have a decent idea on transitions...
but with some adjustments I think you will shape up to be a memorable rhymer
perhaps you will develop a flow that works with your style.
keep it up shep
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