Okay, I had to look up the name Conker cuz it didn't ring a bell to me, and now Mr. J's verse makes perfect sense. I assumed on my first read there was a reference I didn't know, and Conker was it.
Cool verse here J. While from a technical standpoint it's not your strongest piece, you deliver the goods in flipping your topic. A couple slant rhymes that read like a bit of a stretch to me, and a couple places with single syllable rhymes where I think you could've probably reworded to increase the rhyme without sacrificing content.
Asylum, this was alright. It felt kind of rushed though tbh. The flow feels stretched in a couple of places, and the way you transition from the earthquake/chasm plot to the zombie plot feels a little jolting. Like we just jumped from one plot developing to a completely different plot developing. In the end you tied them together with the apocalypse but it just felt like it could have been more flushed out.
With a more well-rounded verse imo, Mr. J takes this one.
v/ Mr. J
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