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Old 05-12-2016, 09:26 PM   #6
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Enjoyed NYC's verse so much more than Breathless. Breathless kind of felt rush, and the only tie in I see with the topic was mentioning a still frame picture..

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The sky turned white in a muted and angelic explosion
and the last man on earth...laid back as a relic of soldiers
Probably my fav' couplet from NYC. The build up was perfect if you ask me. You didn't write too much where I got bored, it was just the right amount. Good shit on that. A lot of cats write too much (for me) and I end up disliking a verse due to that. Like I said, breathless felt rushed. Easy vote in my eyes

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