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Old 05-13-2013, 10:30 PM   #6
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This was pretty well done, I was digging the flow you were using
the word usage was on point as well, it seems like you stayed on point for the most part
I was digging the whole thing really, it did have a few hiccups here and there
but nothing really damaging to the piece, it seems like you know what you are doing
buuuuut...if you had more of a topic to roll with you might shine brighter...
get it right Rihanna....nice drop
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