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Old 05-11-2013, 10:37 PM   #6
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Humorous priest section from genocide, although the penance of "couple hail mary's" was funny for the crimes of natural - murder etc. When reading the first line of Genocides first paragraph, thought the twist was going to be the priest was possessed/incarnation of satan that would have been an interesting direction. Perhaps, though this was better without that - more focused and conceptually clear. Thought the language from Natural was stronger than Endsanes in the two comparable sections. Endsane had better rhyme schemes, but the bluntness/directness of Natural created a strong writing.
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