both verses here show some flashes and some potential, but also leave a lot to be desired.
mvgt Breathless
mainly because his verse created some intrigue and emotion
The Law can rhyme, but needs to first focus on clarity&message.
I'm hardly ever "mean" with my (serious)feedback... perhaps that's why I'm keeping this vote brief.
A shame because I see that both writers here have talent.
Both of you have the ability to bring a better game next time
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