[Mr. J]

Buddha, it seems as though you took an alternative route
when I first started reading I wasn't concerned by what its about
your rhyming seemed to be your soul focus (like I wont notice)
after a second read I see your interpretation of your own opus..
this feels darker than a lot of your previous work, so devious....
It works! its just so different from your norm I couldn't believe it at first
I wouldn't have used enjoyment or the whole line at the end of the verse
(the opening) I would have used joyous makes more sense for what its worth
as we continue down through the second half you picked up speed
after Da Vinci I think it needs a face lift & it would be fixed up neat :)
the ending felt different as well but this is a completely different side to you
one that I may grow to like. this was cool & really nice.....its true...

JESO, I really enjoyed this because it made more sense this time around
you focused more on your foundation instead of getting your rhyming down
although the pic isnt here I am assuming you may have used the old man
a person who is tortured, going through the motions, confused by why his souls damned
at least thats what Im taking away from this, to be honest I didnt understand your whole plan
but the fact that you came through with more focus than usual
makes me admire the fact you showed & that is beautiful.

V/Buddha I feel like Buddha came through with a more deeper motive
his verse made sense & he had a better flow for all to notice...
Jeso neglected to bring a pic but I think I understood his path
but the fact his topic is missing well...that would really hold him back
Im glad to say this is one of the more enjoyable battles I wanted to see
it feels like a great rivalry that the league honestly needs...
in the end I feel Buddha took this with his topic & flow
v/Buddha thats just in case any of you wanted to know..