Scheme-wise, this was intriguing. I really liked your switch ups and rhyming patterns, along with a quite nice usage of multis. Now content-wise, this was quite different from what I've seen from you so far! I really appreciate the strikingly poetic tone and subtle abstractness behind some of the lines. Some of the lit. elements you employed really helped painting a vivid picture,
mere mortal
the pot can see what the kettle looks like
your emotions and "subtle" anger were conveyed very nicely.
you feast with your demons while I struggle to feed mine
Thought this line stood really out with a nice contrast, a rather common comparison but your approach was original, imo.
Overall, an enjoyable read!
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