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Pinot Grij · 02-03-2016, 01:28 PM

Cool story. Technically Act II and Act III would be the same Act since you don't really change scenes or anything.

tempting the balling fool off his mortal cord
I don't get this line.

Last act is troublesome. You could clarify the story here since it's the most important part.

02-03-2016, 01:28 PM	#2
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195064	Cool story. Technically Act II and Act III would be the same Act since you don't really change scenes or anything. tempting the balling fool off his mortal cord I don't get this line. Last act is troublesome. You could clarify the story here since it's the most important part. __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.