slecht
I like that you brought something different to the table. Your verse suffered from brevity though, and I wish you had spent more time fleshing out the concept. The sentiment was there (especially at the end), but the rhyme scheme was weak and more appropriate for a poetry verse.
Godcomplex
Have you written under another moniker? Your style seems familiar. While your content was a bit esoteric for my personal taste, it was well executed. The opening couplet was pure butter and there were some great descriptive passages throughout. The "sewer, dirt" and "nuclear/nucleus" rhymes were my only pain points.
Vote
Godcomplex took this one pretty handedly with the more developed and innovative verse. His piece made me pause and imagine, which is always a good thing.
VOTE = Godcomplex
- B.
Last edited by Argh; 01-13-2016 at 12:13 AM.
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