mmlp - i like your description of the way of the universe and shit. i did a somewhat similar piece a while ago about black holes and i think yours was executed better. enjoyed the read. favorite lines..
all shifting in space and further apart
some distance away was the birth of a star
unearthing a spark that would break from the rest
was certain to start a chain of events
^felt that was your strongest point.
ydk - favorite lines..
It makes me question existence, existential conversations evolve,
Unlike ourselves within this minds of us all.
What is life? Is it breathing or hoping?
Is it finding a way to smile, or naturally coping?
your piece was a simple examination of existence and questioning one's place.
you connected with some questions and assertions i truly felt. dope piece, just wasn't developed to a standard i've come to expect from you. better luck next week.
/v mmlp this week came with a more developed piece that overall had better coherence, style, and flow. he took this pretty solid imho.
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