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Old 10-12-2015, 02:11 AM   #3
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I'll fuckin' spring from beyond it and leave you bludgeoned to death
skeletal structures get crushed whenever I'm touchin' the pen

^^^^
I didnt like how you set this up, I get the idea you went for...
but nah, it just felt weird and made me feel like a dirty whore for liking this
but you had some enjoyable concepts that made me crack a smile
the ending section with the cement cold buildup was pretty cool
enjoyable piece, keep writing...
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