SOVEREIGN'S VOTE ON BATTLE: Dearg vs Spoken
Dearg: This one didn't try to be metaphorical or deep or poetic at all; you just told a story. That's fine, but what wasn't fine about this verse was the awful rhyming. Almost every other multi set was broken; that level of awfulness makes a verse unreadable.
The story itself? Meh. It was just about the most obvious thing that anyone could have imagined for this topic, coupled with basic and poorly-thought-out emotional ploys, such as the mentions of a hard life and a loving daughter.
I'll also give a special mention to this line:
Quote:
Originally Posted by Dearg
Fingertips strumming the instrument's tummy,
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as the most unintentionally hilarious thing I've read in a long time.
Final Score: 7/20
Spoken: You went for a more metaphorical angle than your opponent, but I wasn't feeling it. Actually, scratch that - what the hell was this even? What did it mean? How does this connect with the picture/text...
wut da fuq is dis?
The rhyming was weak; less broken than your opponent's, but less complex as well, and still had issues with bad multies. More importantly though, even though I found meaning in this, I felt like I was overthinking the lines and reading it in. Maybe that was your intention, maybe it wasn't. But in the end, this seemed overwrought at best.
Final Score: 8/20
Final Thoughts: Both were weak but I enjoyed one slightly more.
Spoken gets my vote over Dearg (8 - 7)