Ayo this was a cool battle.
Nigma stepped his shit up a lil bit. I liked how crisp his writing was and thought it was a dope edpoe imitation. If it was an imitate poe assignment for class, it surely would've received an A (although to be sure there would be mad ricantheoriez in his class too). I thought the phrasing was delicate and a very strong simulacrum of the original author's energy vibe. I thought the shit was pitter-patter not pitter padder that shit sounded 3rd grade to me but other than that it was dope.
Razah cool shit here bruh. I thought you got outclassed here though. Nigma's writing was noticeably more complex and subtle, but you had some dope concepts in here. I just wasn't feeling the glib manner in which you delivered some of the lines, like the is it dinner line and others. Just has a rushed and blase quality to it that could be fixed with a bit more thought and subtlety. For a first read though, you've made a fan of me. I believe in you, keep doing it.
V/ Nigma
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