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Spoken - Good to have you around here! I liked this piece, especially the closing lines. It showed your maturity as a writer in not going for the shocking twist in the tale and an overreliance on that to get you the win with a big reveal. So many fall into that trap and I pleased you didn't reveal it was a metaphor for something else come the finish. I liked the almost half-lines at the close of each stanza too, it was used to good effect and you're the first I've seen do that. Props.

Vulgar: From line one your visual imagery was immense, I could almost smell the tea leaves. You're too good. The pollen line as well was a deft touch before you had the fetus/seed associative wordplay section which works for you. You really excel in these more abstract worlds you create and thrive in. I love it. This was you in your element.

Vulgar got this.