[PancakeBrah]

Razah -

I, personally, think that line five was better than six. But who am I to disagree with the author?

GodComplex -

This was pretty funny. Picturing Barney as a nihilist and softly suggesting he could fuck a kid as a last hurrah. The vocabulary of the kids themselves brought me out of the piece a bit. A bit too advanced, didn't really capture that voice well. If you had I think the dichotomy of the questions vs. replies would've been even funnier. But this was solid, and good in some sections. A nice misdirection kind of verse. I enjoyed reading it.

V/ GC