UB, felt like you rushed this verse. Not the typical type of verses I see from you. I mean, it was a decent verse I guess, but, nothing too special. Nothing really stood out to me, so that's a bummer.
Asylum had the better take on the topic. There were a few bars where things didn't even rhyme, so it kind of felt like I was just reading an essay out and not a verse. Besides that, I still think you took it.
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