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Old 08-18-2015, 03:16 PM   #5
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So, Im'a just quote the shit I didn't like.

"Leaving a lifeless being more crispy wing.
Kentucky fried while alive, rendered cheap"

That couplet ruined the piece for me.

YDK:

"Because I still have to clear my computers history."

I thought that was funny, but, it didn't fit well. Should've just stayed serious if ya' ask me.

I liked Rakontur's verse more. The wording was better, and although both had good flowing verses, I feel like YDK's verse was more simple. In this case, it might have hurt him (in my eyes, at least)

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