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Old 08-16-2015, 09:35 PM   #7
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thanks breh's appreciate it...

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Originally Posted by K Panda View Post
Moonlight Sonata is prolly one of my favorite pieces to play on the piano, so I like your closing line. I think youre rhyme scheme and syllable control is impressive, but I think you started a lot better than you ended pattern wise. This was a dop read though, nice to see pieces where people have control over words and use them for their meaning and not just rhyming purpose.

Only question I have is why did you reference Operation Condor. I know of the operation, and I can't quite pin point how youre trying to use it.
It was more of a Jackie Chan reference due to the use of 'stunt double'
but it can be interpreted the same I believe, I recall reading about "Operation Condor" and it had said that there were assassinations involved
& due to my decently adequate knowledge (at least from movies) in an assassination attempt they'd involve stand ins
but I like to link Jackie Chan to it just because he wouldn't let anyone stand in for him
otherwise it was just something to keep the whole verse rolling along as it came to mind
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