Moonlight Sonata is prolly one of my favorite pieces to play on the piano, so I like your closing line. I think youre rhyme scheme and syllable control is impressive, but I think you started a lot better than you ended pattern wise. This was a dop read though, nice to see pieces where people have control over words and use them for their meaning and not just rhyming purpose.
Only question I have is why did you reference Operation Condor. I know of the operation, and I can't quite pin point how youre trying to use it.
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