Vulgar - Free form and great use of the topic you chose. Deep, morbid and powerful, love the closure.
Snoop - ABAB CDCD rhymescheme, I like that a lot. Felt you managed to paint a pretty vivid, sad and dark story out of the picture chosen. The verse is complete beside the fact the poem is void of punctuation, hah, but great nonetheless.
Vote - Snoop. I enjoyed his approach, story and structure more. Vulgar had a great showing as well but I don't think it tops Snoop's submission.
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