[Cereal_Killa]

Deadlion:

This was cool, either you are new to lyrical story leagues or you thought you where gonna get no showed.. this verse seems 1/3 complete to me.. I don’t mean to offend cause you did round it up but it was a tip of the iceberg type ish.. you just started character building had about 4 lines of action and then the resolution.. for a short piece this was dope.. you have all the elements of a great writer you just didn’t get to flush the whole piece out this week.. cool none the less dude, nice drop..

Pent:

Man I felt this piece.. the hurry, the urgency and dire upkeep of being alive.. It’s constant and in full motion.. dude awesome placement of words, structure was dif from usual but I really loved it.. tight man by placing so many internals in each line that’s what drove this piece at its remarkable pace, and by then breaking them with your punctuation.. it was like a sudden stop/pause/period (a calm) then straight back into reality – fast paced and real heavy.. dope dude

Vote = pohfig

I think deadlion is just getten into the swing of things n we will be seeing a lot of dope work from them.. pent your structure was off the chain.. nice match guys g/l