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Old 07-21-2015, 03:39 PM   #6
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Uh, I don't know what direction Tyson was going in, but I really didn't feel it. It felt like a battle type verse / comedy...

What I liked in Tyson's verse, as opposed to ribbit's verse, is that it rhymed a lot more.

I dunno, I really didn't like ribbit's verse either. That shit felt like poetry.

"Conclusion. Is meaning the same with nothing to define it.
The ageold question if a tree falls but no ones there to witness"

Then, you kick a verse off not even rhyming. Wasn't feeling that. But, I do feel like you actually tried to write something regarding the topic and it just felt like you 'tried' harder than Tyson. eh.

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