Zen: Short and sweet. Packed with meaning. Simple with complexity. Definitely worth a second read... or third or fourth. But the slavery reference seems out of place for the revolutionary war. Minor quibble, but that had me distracted a little. But I enjoyed the flavor of your piece like topical skittles.
Dr. Dog: Dope start. Mean that with my whole heart. Dense prose with layered with meaning in that first part. But then the piece started losing steam. I wish you stuck with the original theme. I think you were trying to connect one revolution to the other using the highways a bridging metaphor. But apologies, I could have settled for a little less road work and more etymology.
Vote: Zen - But I think I would have chosen Dr. Dog, if his piece had been more consistent. But props to you both I enjoyed reading what you've written.
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