Pretty similar approaches, which actually makes this a lot easier to judge.
Hush, I liked this line.
the American dream turns to a nightmare off ambien
That was real slick, as far as Destroyer: I really enjoyed the whole piece.
The rhyme scheme was pretty dope through out the whole piece, and these bars in bold stood out to me. I don't think they were brilliant ideas or anything, but they were somewhat clever, enough to put a smirk on my face.
"my status update is that 'it's fucked.'
great.
i tweeted it, just to repeat it.
and, in my interest, it got pinned to pinterest.
but then i got pissed and deleted it.
out of boredom, i posted it on another forum.
with an edit, and it made it to reddit!
all the way to the front page,
but then, in my blunt rage,
i sincerely started to regret it.
cuz what i thought was a riddle...
putting 'not' in the middle
was really a lie and a little pathetic."
vDestroyer
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