[Mr. J]

Well this was lopsided..


Geno, I'm loving the steam that your building to get where you are
you really show some glimmers of breaking out of the rust box you are in
the construction of your verse seems pretty well crafted & flows quite well
your first stumble was rhyming 'pecker' & 'dead bird' I literally lol'd
I'm like what in the fuuu...either way you shined against your opponent

mania, I enjoy the difference in structure of your verse
for me when I read pieces like this I feel like I need a rapid fire flow for it
4 to 6 lines in a verse usually makes me feel robbed though
I feel that if you worked on it and fleshed it out some more it would be great
but you aren't out of touch with how you want to express yourself
you grasp onto the idea quickly and it would be interesting to watch you grow
otherwise I feel like the pace of your verse was outmatched my Geno's verse
had you been placed against someone in the same style as yours you would survive
but at times like this it would be best to come with that weight rather than grace
nice work though...


v/Geno, Geno's verse just seemed to flow better and seemed more on point that mania's
I enjoyed both works regardless of there flaws and found both writers to shine quite well
either way...nice battle fella's